Rescue my thoughts,
Which seem to get lost
In my mind
Written for Haiku Heights
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My First Attempt
At a Haiku, Please Excuse
If It's Incorrect
OH MY GOD!!!
ReplyDeleteIs it really your blog Mister-I-am-so-averse-to-writing-poetry-despite-being-good-at-it DS????
This is awesome!! Precisely what i feel like saying sometimes when i dont get a muse.
I am SO glad to have read this!
Keep rocking :D
@ NS
ReplyDeleteThanks for the compliments NS. But is this a haiku? And yeah, I still dont know how to write a poem :P I wrote my state of mind whenever I sit down to write, the topic was rescue so this fitted in perfectly!!
This is a beautiful poem. You are right to wonder if it's haiku. I wonder every time I write haiku if it's haiku. This is a haiku writer's question.
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ReplyDeleteI think if its beautiful then it does not matter much if it is a haiku or not!!!
Thanks for your comment on my blog!
This is beautiful but haiku usually has 3-5-3 or 5-7-5 syllables. The first line needs less. Maybe use Save (1 sylb) instead of rescue (2 sylb) Does this help? :-)
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