Tuesday, January 29, 2013

Rescue - Haiku

Rescue my thoughts,
Which seem to get lost
In my mind

Written for Haiku Heights

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My First Attempt 
At a Haiku, Please Excuse
If It's Incorrect

5 comments:

  1. OH MY GOD!!!
    Is it really your blog Mister-I-am-so-averse-to-writing-poetry-despite-being-good-at-it DS????
    This is awesome!! Precisely what i feel like saying sometimes when i dont get a muse.
    I am SO glad to have read this!
    Keep rocking :D

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  2. @ NS
    Thanks for the compliments NS. But is this a haiku? And yeah, I still dont know how to write a poem :P I wrote my state of mind whenever I sit down to write, the topic was rescue so this fitted in perfectly!!

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  3. This is a beautiful poem. You are right to wonder if it's haiku. I wonder every time I write haiku if it's haiku. This is a haiku writer's question.

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  4. @ alicekeysmd
    I think if its beautiful then it does not matter much if it is a haiku or not!!!
    Thanks for your comment on my blog!

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  5. This is beautiful but haiku usually has 3-5-3 or 5-7-5 syllables. The first line needs less. Maybe use Save (1 sylb) instead of rescue (2 sylb) Does this help? :-)
    Eliz

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